A collection of poems, musings, micro/ flash fiction, and book reviews
Love all the creepy feelings you generate with your word choices!
Thank you!!
I love creepy and you had me at "watching you". Crisp, clean, and sharp (haha).Though I am not a poet, the last line (for me) took the wind out of that beautiful creep (perhaps because it was expected?)
Thank you, LF. I guess you are right. An anti-climax would have been better. :) I'll keep it in mind for next time.
LF's comment made me think. I wonder if keeping the same creep factor from the second line might help? Something like: 'Waiting for your screams"?
Yes, an element of doubt to continue with the creepy feeling. Thank you. :)
Love all the creepy feelings you generate with your word choices!
ReplyDeleteThank you!!
DeleteI love creepy and you had me at "watching you". Crisp, clean, and sharp (haha).
ReplyDeleteThough I am not a poet, the last line (for me) took the wind out of that beautiful creep (perhaps because it was expected?)
Thank you, LF.
DeleteI guess you are right. An anti-climax would have been better. :)
I'll keep it in mind for next time.
LF's comment made me think. I wonder if keeping the same creep factor from the second line might help? Something like: 'Waiting for your screams"?
ReplyDeleteYes, an element of doubt to continue with the creepy feeling. Thank you. :)
Delete