tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1045047387541959147.post2124346585953218015..comments2024-03-28T20:57:23.855+05:30Comments on The Witchy Storyteller: The NymphSrivalli Rekhahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01102719458284096665noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1045047387541959147.post-42985916377567727122018-06-15T12:06:17.405+05:302018-06-15T12:06:17.405+05:30Hi, Asha. I used the sentence prompt "He foll...Hi, Asha. I used the sentence prompt "He followed her to the woods" for this poem. I haven't followed this month's style (ae freslighe) for the poem. <br />The 'roost' was a bad typo indeed.<br />Thank you for the detailed feedback. :) <br />I'll take your advise and extend it into a flash fiction. <br />Maybe I can post it in future. :) <br />Srivalli Rekhahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01102719458284096665noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1045047387541959147.post-43288455660104440492018-06-15T12:01:20.368+05:302018-06-15T12:01:20.368+05:30Thank you so much. :) It was a typo. Thank you so much. :) It was a typo. Srivalli Rekhahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01102719458284096665noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1045047387541959147.post-22259196682324357162018-06-15T09:12:37.804+05:302018-06-15T09:12:37.804+05:30There was an important underlying message in this ...There was an important underlying message in this piece that got a little lost in the form issues. I love that you're embracing poetry forms at the moment, and it's exciting to see you trying your hand at new things. <br /><br />I had some trouble with the scansion in this piece, and it doesn't conform to the ae freislighe form (which admittedly doesn't have scansion requirements). There were also a couple of instances where I wondered whether the word you'd written was the word you'd meant ("roost" instead of "roots", for example). It's always worth the extra time to read through just once more to check for those little things.<br /><br />I did really enjoy the magical and mystical about this poem, and I wonder what it'd look like if you extended it a little into a flash fiction piece.Ashahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04224720433307953053noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1045047387541959147.post-19426788370838722762018-06-15T09:11:01.448+05:302018-06-15T09:11:01.448+05:30This comment has been removed by the author.Ashahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04224720433307953053noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1045047387541959147.post-70703856548370679172018-06-14T18:18:17.365+05:302018-06-14T18:18:17.365+05:30I love how you set the scene for us right away.
...I love how you set the scene for us right away. <br /><br />I stumbled a little over the "grew roost" line... Not sure if it was a typo and you meant "roots" or if it was a deliberate word choice.<br /><br />In all, this is lovely and magical!<br /><br />MM Schreierhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04142935645289054525noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1045047387541959147.post-50961398017810610662018-06-14T10:21:07.290+05:302018-06-14T10:21:07.290+05:30Thank you, Margaret. I was having trouble with try...Thank you, Margaret. I was having trouble with trying to give it a proper ending. :) Srivalli Rekhahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01102719458284096665noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1045047387541959147.post-62401541499768607342018-06-13T23:42:14.814+05:302018-06-13T23:42:14.814+05:30I loved the imagery clear through to the end and y...I loved the imagery clear through to the end and your choice to transform him into a tree to join the magic. The last line took me out of it a bit, but overall, magical.Margarethttp://unfoldingfromthefog.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.com